Very well written. I like your use of bold type especially. I never have the courage to try things like that in my writing.

Man, I loved the imagery and insight in this piece!! Excellent poetry-prose.

this was quite interesting, i like the connections and the play on words. but im not too sure about the last line. i suppose it works but it seems to be admitting its flawed. - the Lady Elaine

I liked this, but i think the bold actually took away from the piece rather than adding it. it's nice to see the connections yourself, without it being screamed in your face. If it's subtle, it's much more likely to be enjoyed. Good job, nevertheless.

-simpleton