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| I Murder on Impulse 2005-12-19 ch 1,  | abusehumph...! its not too bad ! u lil girl! |
| barbie gurl 2005-11-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseyou can touch u can play if u say "im alwasy urs" bak in the habit of leavin song lyrics lol for tinas reviews i left practiacally the whole song... anyway, i gotta go voldie's behind me and im pretty sure i noe wats going through his mind... its sorta obvious with the hard thing poking into my bak...must rememba 2 use lube and da new move dis tym.. |
| Desirable Damien 2005-11-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseYo Emz, I thourght u n i were rolling. Whoz this louvie dougie wuvie guy? [c review for lost in a lie for more details] How could u give him everything we made together?? U are the person makin our realtion ship a twisted fairytale. Didnt u used to say that...it u were destined to end up with desirable damien ?? Currently lost in a lie and fishing for stars in the ocean... Yours Forever, Damien |
| voldemort lova 2005-10-26 ch 1, anon. | abusehey agen...jus goin thru all ur poems and reviweing argh! u better appreciate this i normally neva review coz im so lazy! or im off doin maughty maught things to my husband...lol didnt need to noe that did u? oh wel im sure noli has dun worse to u! lol pole+dancer(wink wink) |
| xiaobudian 2005-10-25 ch 1, | abusemiaow...u know what I realise, you could turn them into song kyrics. Hehe..but this poem is quite haunting and I really like the part:Carefully stored memories Hidden in an album Abandoned and neglected shots Of fire, guns And broken glass Of faded smiles And yellowed lace Of life, Within the embers Or a spark Amongst the ashes Keep on writing! |
| allyburner 2005-10-13 ch 1, | abuseThis is definitely your most beautiful piece so far. Definitely. I adore the imagery. I adore the style. And for once, I didn't mind the shortness. :D I love the bit with the 'yellow lace'. The rhythm and flow in that section was perfect. OMG, I want you to publish this somewhere. Only suggestion: don't capitalise the 'Fairy-tale'. It cliches the repitition of the title in the poem. Just leave it as a normal word. It will flow better, and attract a little less attention, and seem more part of the poem than just something to make English teachers happy. But oh, it's so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so beautiful! I LOVE IT! - Ally B. |
| Wishing On the Same Star 2005-09-26 ch 1, | abuseyes... no faith in the world i see? =P very nice poem. wish i could write like you *sniff* =P |
| Sally-andersonn 2005-09-25 ch 1, | abuseyou seem to have lost faith in the world, like mee! |