heh, cute story. i

Interesting beginning! Lots and lots of dialogue though...almost the entire thing is dialogue--but that's understandable since there's so many things going on. Keep going with this one!

This looks interesting, though some more detail could help, and when the people are talking it gets confusing [at least for me] because i have to go back to see who said what. Besides that, this looks pretty good!

Haha - I know how THAT feels. Feeling like you hate somebody because they're intimidatingly perfect. This looks like it could get really interesting really fast! Can't wait to read more! (I love the dialogue - really moves action along!) -- J.max

Ineresting dialogue, please go on and update soon!