Still loving this. I am so sorry for taking so long to review! Just know that I haven't forgotten your story :)

Hope to read more soon!

~Carm~

[There was not a cloud in the sky and the moon was full, making any object in the garden light enough to see from [Andria's] balcony.] - missed an apostrophe

[She had spent the last seven months trying and she knew hardly anymore about him [than] she did when they met.] - should be "than", not then, because you're not referring to time, you're making a comparison

[He was far [too] annoyed to go to the large training room tonight, ] - "too", not to

[She must have already gone back inside[,] he thought.]

[Laying her head down on her pillow[,] Andria closed her eyes and attempted to clear her mind from all thoughts.]

I'm just being nitpicky - you need to go through these chapters and correct your typos. They're by no means intrusive to the story, but if you're a grammar and punctuation nut like me, it bothers you. xD Also - you typo'd "exist" on the summary, might pay to fix that.

The chapter itself is good - I like the description, it makes you feel like you're really there and you're feeling what they're feeling. Bian seems like a troubled person to me - whatever conflicts you present with him are bound to tangle his bond (or to be bond) with Andria. I'm looking forward to seeing how you've developed their relationship!

Oh, and just a warning, I make it a priority to review every single chapter I read, so every chapter you've written so far will be reviewed by me on a chapter-by-chapter basis. You're gonna have a full inbox, haha.

Good writing. I like the setup between description and dialogue. You have paragraphs that set the scene slowly, that build the character's actions; which are then balanced by their dialogue.

Menacing gargoyles... a foreshadowing? I'll like to see where you go with them.

Also, there are some parts where you can shorten the paragraphs, just to make for easier reading.

I like the cliffhanger end!

Minor things:

"Bian had stopped playing with the water in the fountain and was sat with his eyes closed." -> "was sitting"?
Overall, keep up the good job!

update soon

This story keeps amazing me with each new chapter. Every time I think something is going to happen, something completely different occurs. I love that :)

I'll try my best to read your new chapters sooner. Promise.

~Carm~

This is a truly wonderful story. I loved reading every word. You've got a flare for storytelling, that's for sure. The only thing I have is that some of the paragraphs are extremely long. Maybe separate them a bit, or perhaps cut them down? It's an excellent story, either way :) I hope you update soon. I see that it's been awhile since you last updated, but hey, I can hope!

~carm~

Awesome story keep up the amazing work.

I really like it, its a good cliffhanger. Can't wait for the next update.

I really like this, I like where its going and can't wait for an update.

o i knew it! of course hes a vamp! lol, i love it. and i love her lil tirade about vamps not existing! you prolly understand, im absolutely fascinated by vampires. the part with the swords and her quoting stuff was funny and then o bian walked in with his shirt off. now that was beautiful...lol. i cant wait to see how they start to get along. ; )

m yeah kinda creepy. what exactly is sean? he's something to know what bian is. this was actually one of your shorter chapters but just as good and packed with info. o and i think kael is cool and uberly cute. ok hott. definitely write on. i cant wait to read more! =)

beautiful and intriguing once again. a couple things, though, you spelled "deer" as "dear" at one point. it was more towards the beginning. i dont know exactly where, sorry. and one of kael's lines is kind of ackward. it does not make grammatical sense though i knew what you were trying to say. the dream sequence was awesome! it really caught my attention. very different and i cant wait to c how it pans out in andrias life. the metamorphs are definitely cool, lol. o but this was my absolute favorite: "devastatingly beautiful." what a gorgeous phrase. you really get the extent of her beauty across. lol, it would be funny if kael could change into a whale. and please dont every stop writing this! i had a story up here for a while and then i stopped writing. i wish i hadnt. it could have been really good. but, alas, im here for you now! dont stop writing and post asaypc (as soon as you possible can). hehe...

o very dark. i like. and i love your long chapters! (btw red and black are my favorite colors so i love the room and pj's.) there were a few grammar errors, though to tell u now would be pointless cuz the chap is so long. i dont know if you have anyone read the chaps, but you should. they can catch the mistakes you miss. everyone needs an editor. the story is very cohesive. incredibly so. i cant think of any times i have been confused. though i will let you know if i am. i really really like this so i am bearing with u even though i want to know everything now! lol, but i know. all things in due time. please update soon though. dont give up on me, lol! you really are talented. if you keep writing i would so try to get this published once it is long enough.i am NOT even joking. = ) though, to publish it, the history would need to be even more detailed i think. thats always my favorite part of a fantasy book, the world that has been created. soon! update!

AGH! poo on you for having such awesome cliffhangers! but definitely cookies for getting your chapters out so swiftly. but seriously, you have got to stop creating such cliffs as leave me hanging on for dear life! i must know what happens. obviously, i now know that fanya is inside andria. but now i want to know y andria has not died yet. apparently she should have already. PULEZE post soon! im addicted to your story. minus a couple grammatical errors, it is fantabulous! i absolutely love it. you really have a knack for writing.

your avid audiencezeriae

o "her"? me gusta. this is intense. i like bian and brishen sound like a cute old guy, though im sure appearances are deceiving where he is concerned. im so glad you put up this chapter! please keep going if only for my sake. and this "her" that has sealed herself away sounds like the spirit of an old old magician or vamp or something. i just wanna know. ugh...so, yeah

your faithful waiting readerzeriae