 Koba van der Lubbe 2005-09-30 . chapter 1This is ok, but i wish you had gone into a greater backstory. Like, why she got picked, and why that kid brought the gun in the first place. I mean, people normally have a reason for carrying handguns. I mean, maybe it was intentional, but we know nothing about the shooter. Thats something you should have added, in my opinion. Well, great job overall. |