So full of the feeling of hopelessness and lifelessness, lost and isolated, wonderfully depicted.

and land with a crasha sudden impact: consciousness

my favorite line; maybe because it's all so sweetly cynical. Great job.

Very dramatic for just a loss of sleep :D Very well written though, I like the second to last stanza.

Ps. If you have time it would be great if you could check out some of my stuff too!