I loved this poem. Very creative way of conveying your thoughts..You have a great flow and imagery too..I loved the lines "Still a flicker of life, hanging by a thread".. Definately a good start..So, keep up the good work ;)Write on!

--Meme

Nice and deep rooted; just how I like them. I havent read your stuff in a while, but this one is great. Keep it up. -alx