Favorite line: "and now you're dizzy and your world/spins before your celery green eyes." I love that description of the eyes. That would be such a cool color of eyes. Anyways, yes, very sad and powerful. Nice work. Keep writing! :)

i liked this.alot.because you put alot of emotion and intensity into it.and because i can relate.

wow dear...very, very powerful...*hugs*...very sad though...gah...the style worked very well for this poem...

whoa laelae. thats ** amazing. whos it for? i know what its like to worry about people with alcoholic fathers. including my own... this was super moving.

Wow, this is realy good. There's something about the beginning of ir that doesn't seem to flow right, but it might just be because I'm not use to reading poetry in that style. The emotions are very real, and I can really relate to it.

wow, this was really good and emotional. i love how much good imagry you put into it. its really an inspirational piece. you can tell it comes from your heart. great job and keep writing!

~davida

That is a great poem. It's very meanigful. Some of the sentences are a bit choppy; some of the lines where you end the sentence but include the next few words in the same line. I really liked the line "homeless pieces of red glass scar my spirit and stab my soul." That is a really good way to put your heart breaking and your soul aching and spirit crushed. I am amazed at how you wrote so many poems (I scrolled down your list) and im definetly going to read and review more.

I like this. I esp. liked 'homeless pieces

of red glass scar my spirit '. Nice job. Keep up the great work.

um...this is a pretty good poem but i'm gonna be honest, i like ur usual style better 2behonest. this flows good and the poem is okay but i think u should edit it a little bit. the best bit of this tho was the phrase 'celery green eyes'. that is really unique and original. i love that, awesome job:-)

This has a definite glittery sixties feel to it. I love it.

aww... this was a sweet (though saddening and disturbing) poem. The devotedness, the pain the person is causing you, the pain the person who is causing you pain is feeling... (woah, that's confusing!)

touching, memorable, and a little bit freaky. wouldn't wanna go thru that she IT. I know you can get through whatever life throws at ya, Leah, and if writing helps, more powah to ya! !!KW!!