My God, that is haunting. I really like the stanza about 'icy cold summers.' That is nice. This is just a creepy poem. Nice work. Keep writing! :)

Good poem. The best time I can write poems is when I'm down. So of course most of my poems are sad or what not. Writing about the happiness in life is hard. Yea, life can be great sometimes, but I can't write about it. Anywho, I really liked this poem as well.. Keep up the good works.

gah...suicide sucks...*hugs*...nice poem though...

This is awesome, great job!

yeah~~ i agree with your authors note~ but your poem had some well expressed emotions~ good work

keep writing!

haha, suicide is bad, i should know my mom tried three times when i was a baby, anyways, great poem its very well written, love the word chocie

very good. great rhyme and flow. nice way to spill your emotions. my favorite stanza of this would have to be the one that says "icy cold summers/soul of snow/ how to escape/ there's but one way i know" i love this because it gives so much imagry and so much beauty with words in that one little stanza. i find it amazing. and i agree with you in ur A/N. suicide is bad, and i would never commit suicide. if i told you i never would think about it either, then i'd be lying. i've thought about it but i could never go through with it for a number of reasons, it would just be 99.9% impossible to me. but, yeah, as if you care anyway, well, i gotta go. great job again and keep writing forever and always!

~davida

I really enjoyed this poem as well. It's depressing and really brings out your feelings. I also like the rhythm of the poem; I'm not a very good rhymer and it amazes me when I see someone who can rhyme every line, but still have it all work with the poem.

Ohh..this gave me chills! The first and last stanza are especially good. I like how you're saying it so simply, with such few words..it's like child-like creepiness.

i agree on the suicide point u made at the end and i totally love this poem. u may hav been feeling down but his poem came out awesomly well. i love the short lines and rhythmtic flow. love it!

It's interesting how suicidal people often daren't commit suicide because of how much pain they fear to inflict on others. It seems to amplify their own pain, yet it also holds them back. They're in limbo. Not exactly a pleasant situation, but I love how you describe everything.

Wow you must have been really down when you rote this, it's really well written really got the emotions out, keep writing. B the way this is XXSunKittenXX under another name I think I've revewed you before.

chilling. beautiful, belongs in a book. the best of the best. one line bothered me "this i know, this i tell" because... idk the rhythm in MY head (which is often wierd and NOT normal, so it may be find for NORMAL rhythm) didn't work for that line; too many syllables or something? It made it stand out and it freaking MESSED UP MY THOUGHT-TRAIN! Argh! other than that, I loved it, 'twas beautiful 'twas on a summer's evening in his tent, that day he overcame the Nervii... heh oh, yeah, just a side note: please don't kill yourself! you promised! Luff ya, Emm.

PS KW