I like the idea. It's a good idea that has -stunningly attractive- potential. You could make this into a big series. Just add a boat load of description and you got yourself a story. Btw, I worked a lot on my story, could you review it for me, please? The Stoneworker.

Interesting story. I like the ending. Not exactly surprising, but still good. The characters were decent, but not incredibly realistic. Nice completed feel to it though. Good job.

*grins* Quite good. I would change the first sentence though. Mainly because I can't figure out what the heck it means... Something about what the room looks like?

Destiny-testing, eh?

The first part of this read like something right out of Phillip K. Dick. I was very impressed.

However, from the line "Some time passed. Many things happened." it was far too choppy, condensed, and impersonal. I felt that this section spoiled an otherwise excellent story. Rather than this (for lack of a better term, no offence meant) hack-job of a section, you could easily have expanded this concept into a larger short-story, maybe even up to 10k words. Since you're a good writer in general, maybe that's something for you to consider as a future project.

The end wasn't all bad, though. I liked Oliver's final comment on dest-testing. It's a good moral to insert.

Well done, and *do* write some more :p

Another interesting short story. Feel bad for Oliver for getting those horrible treatments when he didn't do a thing. At the end, the computer's prediction is pretty accurate. The only thing is that I think it's a bit rush at the end. But other than that this story is cool.

Hey, I just found your stories, and decided to check this one out because it sounded rather interesting. And it was. A nice concept, and brought out nicely. I enjoyed it :)

'The room they sat in was wrung with fibreglass, set with a kind of gravy-like texture.'

What?

That's a 'blink' moment you just read. (Mine, not yours...nevermind).

Right, well, grabbed my attention and confused the heck out of me! So, um, I'm reading on. (Yes, I'm writing his while I read.)

'The brain testing was worse, hugely so, than an all-over, up the rectum medical.'

Wha? Too many commas overloading the brain--I know, I'm guilty of this lots. Ahem. Um, but I try to fix. Try rephrasing, maybe..?

Ew. What sort of future are we in? I like my brain kept private, thanks...

Woah. That was...weird, but also a very good story.

I could say it could be expanded upon, but I think it's great just how it is. Nice work.

That was pretty neat! It wasn't that original, but the quality outshone that. Your style is short and simple yet effective and strangely descriptive. You may not be Shakespeare when it comes to stringing words togethor, you just go straight for the cold hard facts. That usually doesn't work, but you pulled it off quite well.

The formatting is a bit strange, but I agree, Opera is so discriminated.

Overall this was a job well done! It was fairly average, but far from forgetable. I liked it!

Hey if you have any time, maybe you could check out one or two of my stories?

The formatting is fine.

This was a very...unusual...story, but I loved it. The line "oliver ordered the computer destroyed" cinched the whole story perfectly. Maybe it ties with my hatred of the concept of fate and destiny. A fortune-telling computer stands for just that.

The only real criticism I have is that the frequent use of the terms "empire" and "rebellion," combined with the sci-fi atmosphere, gave it a kind of star wars-ish feel, which took away a bit of its originality. Still in all, a very unique and well-written story.

wow. great premise - i love the sci-fi futuristic feeling, and the program is really interesting. i think the second part where you say "Some time passed. Many things happened" is a little weaker, though. Maybe because the first part is so deep, and it elaborates on his thoughts, and then suddenly you tell us just like that what happened. But anyways, cool story :)

I like your style of writing a lot. Very descriptive with a touch of sphistication and a certain "wisdom" about it.. Enthralling to say the least.

Oh man, this is a great story! Reminds me of Minority Report by Phillip K Dick - that same sort of predicting the future and arresting criminals before they commit crime. Write more.