Oh, we have some fiery anger cooking here! I'm an only child, so I can't connect to this fully, but I can imagine this to be true from many stories I've been told.

My two favorite sections of this piece are, "He was born just to ruin my life, / To make me break like a porcelain vase, / To cut through me with a rusty knife, / To torture me with his disgusting taste" and "I do hate them, I won’t lie, / But my angel and demon are at a deuce, / So I’ll just scream until I die."

I must say this is really good! There's genuine emotion that hits you right in the face as you're reading.

i some times hate my younger brother as well. this flowed nicely, i think that you could really polish it up if you took the time to properly format it as a poem. it gives out strong emotion, which is what makes it a stand-out poem.

Thanks again for being an honest reviewer. I had actually been very hesitant to put up that chapter precisely because I didn't think there was enough action...I don't have anything to put in THAT place for now, but the next chapter will change the pace a bit.

Whoa...sense a lot of anger here. I've felt it too so I understood your words. *sigh* siblings...eventually I will find out why he's here...little brother...he's getting strong too. AHH!

Wow I really like this. I guess because the flow is very nicely done and that I can totally relate.. siblings SUCK sometimes don't they?!! GAAHH SO annoying! But this is a wicked way to express your feelings. Keep it up huns!

It's a little creepy but the poetry does rhyme. You need to work on fluency from one line to the next a bit. If you do that, it will be ten times better. It was a good poem and filled with emotion though.

What can I say? I totally know what you mean... brothers and sisters are a pain in the **... well at least during this time of our lives... this was a funny yet scary poem... haha... Humerous Horror?

Gosh... You really do hate them.. O.o

Good poem!

This is a very different sort of "I hate my siblings poem." It's not at all silly and childish, and I like the use of metaphor.Thanks for your honest reviews. No worries; there shall be action. I was planning on adding some scenes in that had to do with what the "bad guys" were doing eventually, like in the earlier chaptes. Problem is, I just can't think of anything. So for now it's boringness. I'm just trying to add some insight into the characters' feelings for one another so some things that happen later make a lot more sense.

Woah! watch this one; it bites! the words and imagery convey the anger and rage very well, although I like Candlelight better; much better, but that's because CandleLight is amazing, and brilliant!Thank you for the review though. I was describing the darer side of people, I guess, I don't know... I was feeling bitter... *grins* that's why I wrote it... btu thank you; you picked up what nearly no-one does!

holy cows i love you! i know what you mean...pain in the butt families...

anyway, i love the anger!

Claire(R&R me sometime ^_^)

Hehe! ^_^ This conveys great anger! Good work! Keep writing! ^_^

~Anna~