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Reviews For: Adam And Abel

Poe DeLasVegas 2005-11-28 ch 1,	abuseThis poem doesn't tie together very well. It feels like you took the most beautiful imagery you could find that sort of fit together, and then crammed it all under one umbrella. Don't get me wrong - your imagery is beautiful - but you should work on linking your poems together better. Clumps of detached imagery aren't all that attractive.
Chandra-Moon 2005-09-27 ch 1,	abuseThe only reason I don't put this on my favorite's list because then I would have to put EVERYTHING you write on my favorites. This is beautiful...it's so deliberate. Usually I read poetry very quickly, but this I went slowly through. And I enjoyed it. Man, you are such a good writer...and so intelligent. Love this!
WormsofCharacter 2005-09-26 ch 1,	abuseThis is beautiful. I love poetry that contradicts something, and this does just that. It suggests that from the beginning there was nothing to man but that which is present in him now. The phrase "her Medusa-hair" made me want to cry. It's not sad, it's poetry. You are very talented.
Lines To Time 2005-09-26 ch 1,	abuseI spent all day with your "Orpheus" stuck in my head, so to come home to a new poem by you was AWESOME. And oh, you've done it again, Miss Sophie! It helps that I absolutely love the Bible stories, of course, especially that of Cain and Abel after having read East of Eden. But this was just one of those poems where as soon as you finish you have to go back and read it four more times because it was so good. And I love how you left out the imagery this time! You know how much I love your imagery, but the simplicity-- at least, the simplicity of the individual lines, the poem as a whole wasn't simple-- of this made it truly stunning. I mean, it's not as if you had nothing ("aloe vera hands," "devil-red apples"), but you had balance between that and the words which really brought out your meaning. I love you, genius.

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