Oh...

This is one is pretty nice. You're into the whole darkness, and you already know I'm not a fan, so I won't waste your time by repeating myself. :P

You always see dark poetry with kinda victorian language, or old-fashioned english, and rarely ever done well. This piece is good just because it doesn't go nuts in that way, and even when you do take a step in that direction, it doesn't disrupt anything.

There were lines a really liked, like "Imbecile, no interest/Slice away existence." Certain sections have a good flow (like that example) and some don't. As you know, I do like flow, and my biggest bit of advice I can give you is to iron out the rythm. Make it even throughout, or at least less bumpy.

And also, thanks for waking me up. I haven't been to fictionpress is so long (I actually haven't written anything good in quite a long time). It's cool to talk to you outside of lifeuncut, though I don't often get the chance.

Well anyway, keep on writing! You update so rarely. =/