This is so beautiful. I can't even begin to describe... Would you mind if I used it as lyrics to a song? I would give you full credit of course. As I was reading it, I could hear the music. I have to go write it now before I forget. Let me know if it's ok with you. Beautiful, beautiful poem.

Nice write, though I would like to point out this is a gothic style, not an emo style. The emo style of poetry doesn't have a pattern, it's..(Clip taking from Taking Back Sunday)"She said don'tDon't let it go to your headBoys like you areDime a dozenBoys like you are dime a dozenShe saidYou're a touch overratedYou're lushAnd I hate itBut these grass stains on my knees, they wont mean a thing.." See what I mean? Yours, Natasha5 x

I like it, especially the first two lines.. hollow lies, moralize, hehe, it's good! :)