 ayadora 2005-11-26 . chapter 1weird and detached in an artistic way. nice. |
 Nobody-n-Particular 2005-10-21 . chapter 1Abstract and rich. |
 hey maria 2005-10-09 . chapter 1...Wow.
Love the use of parentheses to add more to a word. I don't actually get the meaning...but it's beautiful nonetheless. The last line is so final and powerful. |
 not sure yet 2005-10-05 . chapter 1tasting like aluminum
i dont know, it's good, but i feel blank after reading it, really love the first stanza and the and symbols, nicely done |
 simpleplan13 2005-10-03 . chapter 1cool.. I like it a lot |
 mizu no kokoro 2005-10-02 . chapter 1wow loved the formatting~ the meaning was profound, i must say~ i'm impressed~
keep writing! |
 by His blood 2005-10-02 . chapter 1(this is eyes of lithium.) this. was. **. brilliant. i almost cried, this affected me so deeply. it makes me want to scream & cry & laugh all at once. excellent job, as always. i loved this. |
 Haberdasher 2005-10-02 . chapter 1good stuff, very jagged and emotional. m, i love the abstract...- the Lady Elaine |
 crackpot 2005-10-01 . chapter 1I think it'd work even sans formatting. |
 this is murder 2005-10-01 . chapter 1that's so cool, the format, and the poem itself is really beautiful. i love it. |
 zakei 2005-09-29 . chapter 1WOAH. thats INTERESTING. i dont get the splitting and the bracketing and the dotting, but it looks like a very cool picture. hahas. i dont particularly get the meaning of the poem. : |
 Elizabeth Ebony 2005-09-28 . chapter 1W.O.W
your formatting only makes it all the more totally&utterly delicious.another gem from you--your works never disapoint me.amazing.
E.Ebony |
 lackluster 2005-09-28 . chapter 1something about this is electrifying.
'hush(littlebaby)don'tsayaword'.wow, breathtaking line.
you add so much depth to this, it's eternal,almost. |
 GypsyMothra 2005-09-28 . chapter 1"hush(littlebaby)don'tsayaword" I can hear that being sung. Beautiful job. And I love the stuttering in "(j-j-just like ink&betrayal)" Another wonderful poem. |
 ancient trees 2005-09-27 . chapter 1I like how you associate things like fireflies with explosions and slow fade-aways/ decay in a conversation style. Love how you've numbered the stanzas, but shifted them all out of place, too, so that you can read two ways of meaning into it. Especially: 'brittle bones against you/my/our tongue(s).' |