weird and detached in an artistic way. nice.

Abstract and rich.

...Wow.

Love the use of parentheses to add more to a word. I don't actually get the meaning...but it's beautiful nonetheless. The last line is so final and powerful.

tasting like aluminum

i dont know, it's good, but i feel blank after reading it, really love the first stanza and the and symbols, nicely done

cool.. I like it a lot

wow loved the formatting~ the meaning was profound, i must say~ i'm impressed~

keep writing!

(this is eyes of lithium.) this. was. **. brilliant. i almost cried, this affected me so deeply. it makes me want to scream & cry & laugh all at once. excellent job, as always. i loved this.

good stuff, very jagged and emotional. m, i love the abstract...- the Lady Elaine

I think it'd work even sans formatting.

that's so cool, the format, and the poem itself is really beautiful. i love it.

WOAH. thats INTERESTING. i dont get the splitting and the bracketing and the dotting, but it looks like a very cool picture. hahas. i dont particularly get the meaning of the poem. :

W.O.W

your formatting only makes it all the more totally&utterly delicious.another gem from you--your works never disapoint me.amazing.

E.Ebony

something about this is electrifying.

'hush(littlebaby)don'tsayaword'.wow, breathtaking line.

you add so much depth to this, it's eternal,almost.

"hush(littlebaby)don'tsayaword" I can hear that being sung. Beautiful job. And I love the stuttering in "(j-j-just like ink&betrayal)" Another wonderful poem.

I like how you associate things like fireflies with explosions and slow fade-aways/ decay in a conversation style. Love how you've numbered the stanzas, but shifted them all out of place, too, so that you can read two ways of meaning into it. Especially: 'brittle bones against you/my/our tongue(s).'