This was good, but i thought the line "dead in the dirt with maggots' was a bit too raw in comparison to the rest of the poem. it just didn't feel like it fit. Maybe in something a little darker?still, good job.

-simpleton

I lovwe how you refer to fate/fortune as a person; a lover almost, cruel yet loving. A very fascinating piece. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.