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| emeraldrealm 2006-07-14 ch 1,   | yay. i like how i know that this was written for me and a lot of ppl love it. it wouldnt be a good piece of writing if i hadnt inspired it...!! lmao. |
| Mr. Singh is back 2005-09-29 ch 1, | You write using very classical diction, and this may confuse some readers. This poem is an improvement because its fully comprehensible to the young ears, but is still has the classical type of flow to it. Very, very good. |
| criceto-verde 2005-09-29 ch 1, | This is a beautiful poem, certainly worthy of publishing. Full of meaning, and not like the other two poems of yours I read. You are a very good poet, but to be bluntly honest, the other two poems contained profane language, and these particular two poems were just as good as this one, except the one or two words that jolted the reader. This review is meant in only the most constructive way possible, as I would not want you to hold it against me. But I felt it was worth bringing it to your attention, as your poetry is very well written, with excellent alliteration, tone, meaning, and many other poetic devices. Please keep up your hard work, and I wish you the best of luck with your goals of publishing your work.criceto-verde |
| Toastntea 2005-09-29 ch 1, | Love the last couple of stanzas. I'm not sure about this bit though "The sweet part of bittersweet,The bitter part of bittersweet" it just doesn't sound right to me. Maybe if you kept one line and changed one? |
| Kita-Oimikada 2005-09-28 ch 1, | wow i love this ^-^ you're a great writerplease review my stuff;_;if you dont i might cry... |