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| Sharakinpaix 2005-10-21 ch 1,  | abuseWitty and strong. Thanks for writing this! I personally can relate, because sometimes people don't want to listen to a story, and it's totally fine, because it's still a story. A frustration resounds nicely here: listening to what my dad calls "paper soup" in a lazyman's comment, when they read it because they want something, and they give you paper soup to get it quickly and easily. Like the last stanza says, it's the interaction that counts, not the words. I slightly disagree, however, with the reality of the personna's situation. The only time I've heard someone voice this attitude is when they brought it to Writer's Club, read it, and got angry at anything that wasn't a compliment. Otherwise, the only people who say "I don't get it" are probably fictionpress or fanfiction users looking for a quick reviewer. If it's them your persona's speaking to, I say "right on!" |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-10-07 ch 1, | abusei agree~ you made some great points in this poem~ good work keep writing! |
| grip 2005-09-28 ch 1, | abuse"I’ll still be here with my penwriting words that mean nothingto the people who read themor even to me anymore, maybe." did you need that 'anymore' in there? it makes it not work. Your breaking up of lines doesn't flow as well as it could. There's words at the end of lines that would work better starting the following line. like: "I didn't write for you/but you read it anyway" instead of "i didnt write for you but/you read it anyway". anyways those are just my opinions. good luck |