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| classic violet 2005-09-28 ch 1,  | abuseVery true. Our lives *are*, to me, based on time. P.S: Thank you for your review! :D |
| grip 2005-09-28 ch 1, | abuseIt seemed on this part, the comma after say is misplaced:All we seem to say,Is when? And where? and you could use commas on this part:8:00 time for school the meaning is good. i can't quite tell if you're saying it's good or bad that life is ruled by time. so is it ruled by food, sleep, money, and passions. It's a part of life, not an enslavement |