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| eurtreve 2008-10-06 ch 1,  | abusea couple typos/errors, but I really love the way that you wrote this... |
| RuRu 2006-09-07 ch 1, | abuseWow, you're style is amazing. Its confusing in a sense you love and even though you were barely introduced to the characters you ard dieing to understand them better. Great story. |
| Isabelle Adamowitz 2005-12-02 ch 1, | abuseI really loved the atmosphere of this piece. I have to admit though that the writing is rather vague, but I actually enjoyed it because it added to the softness of the scene. Great job.Isa |
| Kitsune Luver 2005-11-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou are a very talented writer. Just awsome. How do you come up with this stuff? |
| AboveTheSalt 2005-10-16 ch 1, | abuseThis was absolutely beautiful. Complex & intriguing, i was hooked the whole way through. the descriptions were beautiful. the conflict was perfect. i really love this, the transition from you to his and the way the main character is constantly talking to himself, the ingenious colloquialisms - it was all perfect. great, great story. |
| Made in U.S.A. 2005-10-01 ch 1, | abusemhm i like the title. i also like the style of it and the tone and everything. good job and keep writing :D |
| Gant10886 2005-09-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseI read this already and didn't review, I suck, sorry love ya and this story! Very deep and emotionally gripping! |
| Ree 2005-09-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseI went half-way through this the first time thinking the title was "Superman." How dull of me. Forgive me for being ignorant, but what is Supraman, anyway? Anyway, I particularly enjoyed the opening. Really grabbed me, got me interested. :P Which is what a good opener should do, obviously. (Well done on that.) I think it was my favorite part. Other than that, I don't really know what to say. You've always been excellent with short stories like this. Very good handle on the language, I must say. :) And I LOVE your descriptions. Yes I do. Excellent job on everything, overall. I hope people discover this soon, because it is brilliant. (As always.) |
| Nikerym 'Ksherea 2005-09-29 ch 1, | abuseokay i really like this, and i'm not sure why... ^_^ um, i kinda like the 'you say this and that, you do it well, as i usually hate such writing maneuvers. i like your main character a lot. i like that he's not perfect - [The prejudice is almost sad here, but I'm as racist as some so what does that matter.] i like that he's suicidal but not dramatic, and the word/thought flow is fantastic. i like the description of the 'you' - [You want to be in the city, slouched on a tram or a bus with music in your ears - or on a beach - and slumming in your seat like you were made to be photographed.] - that line especially. fantastic. ^_^ |