this was...unexpected i guess, rarely do i see much frustration or anger out of you, but here some is, seemed like this was a great release of emotion but cleanly done, i dont know, i like it though, good flow to it, nicely done

that second stanza was awesome...I love the metaphor with the tarriff

the poem is vividly depicted and the emotion it gives is very true. the choice of words though when it came to the last few stanzas is a bit too modernistically casual but that's just me saying :) all in all, it's still a good piece.

"I’ll see you fuck up / As parents did us" I thought those two lines were the strongest in the piece. Maybe it was the language, or maybe it was because I can relate to the lines, I don't know. But I felt they were strong and meaningful and can carry so much because children become who they are due to who there parents are. A stunning piece. Truely stunning. I felt the emotions running through the piece. I loved it. I knew I'd like it. Your language was simple but that made the piece even more complex because the human heart doesn't need fancy words to describe it. You wrote it really well. Nice work :)

(You'll have to pardon the whole tongue thing in the last review, I just got off work and I'm feeling terribly loopy.) Loved these lines:My heart’s notDisplayed toYour likingIts very "the inside doesn't always match the outside; how can I be what you want me to be when you can't even name the state that you'd like to see. Why can't I just exist with you the way we are, why must love have such cercomstances and steryotypes behind it.

Juliet.

Just thought Id read this for fun; haha

Just kidding; great writing here, have to say right up to the end. Hope the pig of the piece gets his. Even if it's just a poem it reads like a good story, very true to some peoples tragic lives I'm sure.

Good Flow!

Good Writing!

Well Done

C.