o, that last part came rather sadly to this whole romantic mood that was set up, i really enjoyed that though, it's quiet and seems like it should be whispered rather than said, muchly nice

I love that last stanza

just beautiful...I love the title

i never expected the ending to be like that. you have a nice way of showing things from the start and slowly shift and transform them to something else. very nicely done.

"While waves constant impart Their memory Of her loss." It's as if the waves miss her as well... that's really insightful. When I lost somebody, I remember that all of the places we used to go felt dead to me, as if she was important to its survival. And every now and then... I really do catch a scent of her hair for just an instant. You captured that feeling in a very complex way and made it simple to understand. Excellent!

wow... vivid with emotions wonderful words used, and touching all the same good work!

keep writing!

Breathe your whisperedTongue against me-Tongue is such a strong word; don't you think? Its like you say tongue and its like raw power of the gods. Anyway; I always love to read your work out loud and that tongue was perfectly placed in there. "Breathe your whispered toungue against me" it like the sweetest kisses which were kissed by words rather then lips onto your forhead when you were a child. I really love the tone of this.

Juliet.

beautiful delicate evocative sensations, not quite images, the breath, the scent of hair remembered, leaf strew dusk is good, sad. dc

Beautiful, sad and invoking of tears.

I adored it.