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| SapphireEyes16 2008-08-25 ch 7,  | abuseluv the story so far update soon! |
| Maria Regina 2008-08-16 ch 7, | abuseI have to say, I like how it's going so far. And, although I don't know how she feels, it seems pretty pitiful. You're great author and I hope you won't be spoiling a perfetly good opening like some others I've read. So, just so I can see how it'll turn out, I'll put it on my Alerts... Keep going though, you have my full support. MR |
| supersaiyanx 2008-07-30 ch 7, | abuseA great story! Hope that you update soon. |
| Night-Rayne 2008-06-27 ch 7, | abuseThis story is getting really interesting! I can't wait for the next one! |
| soccerbug12 2008-06-25 ch 7, | abuseupdate please! |
| cbprice25 2008-06-14 ch 7, | abuseI am left intrigued. |
| Sparkle 2008-03-10 ch 7, anon. | abuseUPDATE PLS |
| LittleNotes 2008-03-05 ch 7, | abuseHey there, I love the series you write. Right now I'm reading '102 Miles to Hell'. It's awesome! Are you going to update anytime soon? I'd love to read more. Keep up the great work girlie! |
| curator 2008-02-22 ch 7, | abuseAww...come on, Brian's not a complete Neanderthal. I kind of think he's better than the Casey dude..anyway, love your story so far ;) |
| curator 2008-02-22 ch 2, | abuseGod I love this girl. She's awesome... |
| curator 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseLOL funny story so far...I just can't take the name 'Springfield' seriously. I live in a suburb named Springfield, but this one's in Brisbane, Australia...IT's so weird reading it in a story... |
| a 2008-01-22 ch 7, anon. | abuseyou have some grammar mistakes. for some reason you start writing about shannon in the third person. True, he was Brian’s best friend, but he treated SHANNON DECENTLY ONCE SHE GOT PAST THE CRUDE REMARKS. SHE ALMOST PITIED HIM, THOUGH. His best friend was, in essence, lying to him. Drew still had yet to find out that Brian’s father had remarried, and that I was now Brian’s stepsister. If a girl lied to her best friend like that, it would cause a serious, almost unforgivable rift in their relationship. |
| Elle Winters 9 2008-01-13 ch 7, | abuseOhh this is great! |
| abyssgirl 2008-01-12 ch 7, | abuseer - i like the story, but i think you need to proofread before you post. i've found some parts where you need to fix your punctuation and parts where you need to stop switching from 1st person to 3rd person but, other than that, it's fantastic! update! |
| Ashleyy. 2008-01-06 ch 7, anon. | abusethis was an interesting chapter. i can't wait to find out what happens next. update soon. |