 melodylzx 2005-10-04 . chapter 1Thanks for reviewing! (:
Anyway, I love this poem! The repeated lines are really effective, and I love the way you described the scenary to be on wheels. The last butterfly is really symbolic of leaving summer... but I think this poem could have done better if it was in stanzas. (: Try formatting it by pressing shift and enter for a line break instead of enter for a paragraph break.
Otherwise, great job! |