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| Kita_Oimikada 2005-10-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseshort...yet sweet buahaha |
| Sye Tuazon 2005-10-01 ch 1,  | abuseIt's ironic. But I read a piece earlier on the cliches of writing, how expression has stagnated. But my friend proved a very good point. Personality and culture variation will ensure that the arrangement of the words (just like codons in the genes) will survive the transition. Eventually human consciousness will evolve. For now, eloquent, concise pieces like what you've written here will do. My friend Vince likes to listen to Alice DeeJay. She has this one song called Fairy Tales. I could hear it. If this short snippet were turned into a Cautionary Tale, it would be refreshing to see. I'm tired of people gushing about their Cinderella and Sleeping Beauty ideals, as well as Romeo and Juliet in their profiles. Well-done. |
| Archipelago 2005-10-01 ch 1, | abuseLike thx for the review and cool poem you have here. It is really cool in the ryhthtm and the message those last two lines: "Beauty is ugly when it knows,And what is expected is not always right." those so rock. It reminds me in rhythm to "All that is gold does not glitter, not all those who wander are lost; the old that is strong does not wither, deep roots are not reached by the frost." I think it does anyway or it m,ight be something else anyway it's cool and I like that you do so much with so few words. |
| lifescrewsusall 2005-10-01 ch 1, | abuseOh I like the third line. yeah fairy tales bug me too... thanks for the review. i took your advice and gave my poem "I kissed a girlthat wasn't you" some more thought. i'd like to know what you think.. thanks! Aaron |
| Indigo-Andie 2005-10-01 ch 1, | abuseOMG i love it! It says so much more and applies to so much more just because it's so short and not detailed and so general. i love it... |