This is a ver good story, lots of suspence and tension.
However, it does get a little confuzing, maybe you could just make it a little easyer to read? Other than that though, exelent work ^^

ah! make the next one lol i like em there good

You truly have a nice writing style, and I hope you continue this story, seeing as it already has a great start. The only negative point is that your plot almost seems cliché, doesn't it? I mean, the house probably will be haunted, and everything, and although I don't doubt it will be well written, it will be predictable. Another positive point would be the realism you create. Yours characters' reactions and speech are those lots of people would have, which is nice because they can relate to it.

Don't judge my review too severely, this is my first on FictionPress, usually I roam at FanFiction, where I am an author, so it's normal I can't judge on canon.

Keep it up!

Hellvis (isn't my name, of course)