you started off wonderfully but then you repeated show ): the poem's quite gorgeous but i feel as though the imagery is getting tossed at me. beautiful though they are, they vary and the long lines leave me rather breathless after reading. maybe try working on linking imagery or something? but good work overall (:

omg !! I luv ur poetry! Inspiring! Magistic! No words can thouroughlly describe it! Wow!

You're funny. :D