They are so unnaturally beautiful in this. I love it.

The way Ishah is so detached from the reader, the way you can never fully grasp what's going on beneath the surface - it makes her so much more real. I don't know how to explain it. You're very good at giving depth to your characters.

I like the introduction to this. It's true - you can never know why anyone commits suicide, no matter what the note says, what their parents think, what anyone tells you. You can never know. Another great chapter; good job.

...Wow. Just the sheer detailedness of this - waiting for her execution was so excruciatingly slow but I didn't want it to happen - and then the quick shouts of "don't shoot!" took me by surprise. Great chapter.

I love this chapter, the sickening details of his intestines, the beauty of the flowers and the music. It's lovely.

Beautiful. And it's not as dense as the previous parts, it feels much more relaxed.

If I do have any complaint, it's that you're going to make me wait for the next part!

This is lovely.

"Shoulders back, chin up, neck like a swan, elegant in her starvation." Adored that line.

You're great at creating tension. And your descriptions are so vivid, so fresh. Great job.

your title is unique. I really love "the lark ascending"... it's a beautiful piece of music. you write beautifully, too. : )

I LOVE your writing style. good story-please post more soon!

Very amazing. I love it. I'd give a longer review but I'm a little lazy.

Cool. And I liked the Catholic elements in it. Waiting for the next parts! :)

This is beautiful and amazing. It is slightly reminescent of Jaqueline Carey. Anyways please update very soon.

This was also good, keep up the good work!

Interesting, can't wait to read more.

Oh, my Lord. I was hooked from the first bit about the toilets because that's a very interesting way to start a story. I'm not very good at critiquing stories, but I did think this was very good. You have this very detailed, matter-of-fact style of writing and I love it. And the last bit about Headam? That scared me a bit. Futuristic stories always tend to scare me, but that was really freaky. I love this story, wonderful job.