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mylittlechangingtruths 2006-06-20 ch 5,	abusevery realistic. painful. beautiful.. its a great story!!
Siriusly James 2005-12-21 ch 5,	abuseThe whole scene in the beginning makes me hurt inside. Poor Paul - he's just trying to do his best... Poor Tiffany - she knows he's right and he's not lying. I completely understand her urge to run away from everything instead of sitting still. I do that too, if I can. I like the way you talk about the convenience store and the gas station - gives an impression of a small neighbourhood where everyone knows each other. The shoes - Paul - Bethy - hah! SO professional how you describe Paul's way of eating that pizza while he offers to quit school - superb way of showing us that he's still just a kid. Describing of Paul's anger, his "bastard!", the line following it and then the apology - no words! thumbs up I just found myself smiling, wanting to go to the living room to steal my dad's old mixed CD with "I will survive" on it, when you got to talk about Tiffany, and I crumpled. I'd forgot her, in the glee. And then it all came washing down again... God... Typical Mitchell. How is Paul able to do that? I mean, it's not surprising that he does it - he is PAUL, after all, but... it's so impressive. People - can - be - so - nosy. Ask a little girl to mow their lawns three times in the same week, just so they can watch her from behind the curtains and gossip? Disgusting. And it's all black.
SolitarySigh 2005-12-18 ch 4,	abuseSo sad. =[ Write the next chapter soon! I haven't been able to stop reading.
SolitarySigh 2005-12-18 ch 2,	abusekd;sd;adh;as I feel so bad for Paul! =[ You're an amazing writer! Keep it up.
MyHarlequinRomanceMCR 2005-11-29 ch 4,	abusewhat a sad story. little tiff sure is a stong one. and their father is so crule to pauly and the rest of the kids. cant wait untill the ext chapter.oh and i love how you use great english and spelling and stuff. it makes it alot easier to read. I LOve the staory and keep up the awsome job. Emily
Siriusly James 2005-11-12 ch 4,	abuseBabes, I'm BACK! After an amazing night (didn't get home 'till five in the morning) of acting (with the best audience EVER - we had to wait with saying our lines so they could finish laughing/clapping several times during the play!) and partying afterwards, I am finally ready to come back to my regular life! - the beginning rocks. "So," "So?" "So," - Mrs Fleming's reaction - so typical! - Mr Fleming's reaction almost made me throw up. I still don't get how anyone can hate a part of their children so much. yeah, of course I get it that he loves Paul, but it's just... I mean... GAH, it's not that he CHOSE to be that way, right? I can't find words for this, I'm just... Geez, I wanna go crash something while listening to loud music. - Bethy. Am I the only one thinking that if it had been anyone else who had yelled, it hadn't made the same impact on people? - Once again, outside the bedroom, Bethy. We all know she tries so hard, and at some point I knew she'd pour it out. But Tiffany can't help being who she is - it's not her fault that her dad's an idiot. - How did she ever fall in love with him? HOW? - Many children = learning responsability, how great. but ALSO never being the baby very long. Nicely said. - Tiffany's way too busy growing up. Well, of course she is, because obviously her dad doesn't like crybabies. - Poor thing. Poor child. Her mum is so great, even though I'll bet she has no clue what to do and probably goes staright from Tiffany to cry alone in her bed. Great job on this chapter, I can't wait for the next one (it's been a long time since you updated, you know?!) I love how you've given Paul's siblings personalities that can lead to people having a favourite "Paul-sibling", instead of just naming them and letting it stay at that. It's things like these that make a good writer.
gena (pen name- gena b.) 2005-10-25 ch 4, anon.	abuseomg... i LOVE it! ur such a desriptive writer, its AMAZING! i love it how u describe the meotions tiffany is feelin when her dad doesn't some back for her. great job!
WrittenInJello 2005-10-23 ch 4,	abusePoor Tiffany. I never stopped to think about the anger between siblings when one parent chooses one over the others, but as Bethy proved, it's definitely real. Angst, angst... hoping for a happy resolution... And you updated squee -WiJ
Nagako 2005-10-16 ch 3,	abuseOh my god. This absolutely destorys me.
Tammy 2005-10-16 ch 3, anon.	abuseDamit! >_< Post more! Now! kicks cliffhangers
WrittenInJello 2005-10-16 ch 3,	abuseAH! You did the cliffhanger! Argghghhghdh... chokes off, muttering to herself Absolutely brilliant (and, oh my goodness, actually edited. Weird. Wonderful.) Please update soon! -WiJ
Siriusly James 2005-10-15 ch 3,	abuseTwo things: Do they even have plastic forks at McDonald's? And it works better with "Tiffany's brown eyes" instead of "Tiffany's eyes (brown)".That aside, I'll mention the things I adored: - Your capturing of 11-year-olds and how tough it is to find new friends at that age. - The metaphor about Tiffany being shut in a freezer, with the steak from the day before staring at her. If I had had any doubt about the author of this, I didn't anymore. - Paul's pencil. - How Tiffany just doesn't UNDERSTAND Paul's reasons for not wanting her to protect him. - The way Paul and Steven get each other worked up at the table, and how Steven forgets about the kidlets, while Paul thinks about them. It should be the other way around. it's sad. - The things Steven say. They're terrible, and I stille don't get how anyone can be like that. - Paul: "goddamn pansies!" - Steven tries. He does. Because he KNOWS that Paul's right; he's supposed to love his children no matter what, but he can't defy his feelings and his thoughts towards Paul, and so he's torn. - The image of Paul and Tiffany curled up beside each other in Paul's bed. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. "Paul ruined everything"? Is he coming out already? And if he isn't then what...? No, don't tell me; I'll read it when you post it! Gah, i can't wait!
Thorn's-girl 2005-10-15 ch 3,	abuseExcellent. I love this side of Tiffany, this story, and the way you tell it. Seriously, I can't express how much I like this story.
Siriusly James 2005-10-09 ch 2,	abuseWhy are people like this? How can they be so insecure, so unsure about who they are themselves that they can't accpet anything that's the slightest bit different? Yeah, fine, beat up someone else because he dares to be himself, just because you have a brief hope that it'll make you feel better and make you fit into your own skin, even when you know it won't...I was so afraid that they wree gonna see her wriggling towrds the cell phone, and I wanted so much to step into the story and ** (sorry, quarter for Manda) kick their asses!I still don't get how you can love one of your children more than the others, it's... no, I just don't get it.One thing, though: The chapter's called "Third grade" and Tiffany's almost nine years old, but in the first paragraph, you write about fourth grade...I'm looking forward to next chapter - do you know how many there'll be yet?
Tammy 2005-10-08 ch 2, anon.	abuseI agree whole-heartedly; why didn't Paul break sooner? ;_; Paul--!

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