It reminds me of FitterHappier or whatever that Radiohead thing is, cept less robotic.

It iddn't really catch my fancy, but in its difference it . . .reaches out to me, so it is okay after all.

Ugh, you picked the wrong time to get me to review something :P

Kat

Wow.. the difference the punctuation makes is huge. At first I was comparing differences between the two, then I read the first, and then the second. Although they say the 'same' thing, I felt like they tell a story.. it's amazing that you could do that with the same words, just different punctuation.

"I think nothing she thinks. For me, all is lost. In her eyes I see nothing."

The hopelessness really comes through in those lines.. this poem was beautiful, regardless of whether or not it was happy. Deep, and vivid- I loved it.