This story was short, but it's cute and sweet.

nichloe

Neat ending! Serves the story well and he so subtly became Fay again =)

Oh scary, i am a twin, my twin has thought of killing herself a few times and was even close to it before she chickened out. No wonder why his brother's loss is still affecting him so intensely, i cannot imagine losing my twin, well of course i can but it isnt pretty and probably will be much much worse in real life time than what i see in my mind!

He sighed. “You do know this is going to change everything?”

Abit strange, like he's out of character or sthing...

Abit too poetic to be realistic at times. Like what they say.
I thought shooting stars werent stars at all, they're actually just meteors.

Fear is a bit wierd, it dint give that impression in the first chap. Painting his lashes darker? Hms...

you were the most frustrating human being on the planet.”
is this a typo?

Chaps should be abit more meaningful i think

Hhaha, some of the things they say in here is very corny but its quite funny to read

'Fear stiffen.' Think its meant to be Fear stiffened. Anywho, another simple one. I liked the first chapter better but this one also has its highlights like, its quite calm and easy to read

Cool start, not quite quirky, abit different i guess. Its cool i like it. Simple but not stupid if u know what i mean, not really good at reviewing,..

I think your writing style is really unique. It's so poetic and it makes everything seem so much more significant. Amazing job :)

This was an interesting chapter... Lily seems like an interesting character.

I played Kelly Clarkson's song Cry while reading this and I wound up crying (like I always do when I listen to it), but gosh. Fear/Fay is the cutest character I've ever read.

Your story was so simple, but it had SO MUCH meaning. It's amazing. Period.

wow. talk about pyscho. she's actually very hilarious. i fell in love with her when i first started reading already!

THIS WAS SO GOOD.
I should probably stop shouting.
When I was reading it, I felt like I could be Lily. Or that she was me. And it's so rare for a character to do that.

THIS IS SO AMAZING.