Aw! He sounds so sweet! *cuddles*

Nice start. I like how you made Fear her prince charming and everything. Um...I hope Fear remains a bit of an enigma through out the story. Please update soon.-Grem-

alright, can I say you have god given talent and shouldn't dquander it? ;) or that your word use is impeccable and your writing is simply divine? yes, I really do think you have god-given talent and that your writing is one of the best things I've read today (and your poetry is wonderful!). I love the name "Lillian" and I was just so happy to see it mentioned in this. I have no clue why, but certain names make me all giddy. I adore your writing and the briliant pacing you have makes the story flow so smoothly. lovelylovelylovely. yes, I adore this.

I am so adding you to my favorite authors lists.

* as beauty dies *

Yay! I likey very much. Fay sounds so adorable! I love girly boys. Please review one of my stories! It would make me happyful.

Wow! This is better than anything you have writen so far. It runs so smoothly that I don't have to start and read something over. Though its like I feel like I want to read this chapter again and again or at least some parts of it... because the wording seems mystical or something. Like her opinion of the boy is cool. I get th picture he's a scared little thin mouse... but a cute descriptions fit with the sentences well, its like you really haven't tried to look up words for it. And that's what I mean how it flows, it feels like you have writen this with the descriptions fit into my mind quite well. This is the best first person I have read on here. Good job bean.

Nice. Really nice. It's interesting, and pretty promising. I find it... different, and I like the frankness of the protagonist. The simplistic style puts the situation down in very clear terms, very pristine, and it fits. I like the Fear bit too. I really like the simplistic style of this.

One thing that I found was quite dangerous was the "It was me being weird again," because it may fall into the usual cliched character trait of the protagonist being "weird", to disguise having a "unique" personality to distinguish her from other girls.

Yep, I like it, and it leaves me wanting more. Especially since the male character reminds me of a beautiful boy whom I had an affinity with for a while, and yet our paths diverged from each other not too long ago.