wow... amazing. just everything about that was so beautifully crafted.

i would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work, it would mean a lot.

this is so fucking amazing
iloveit iLOVEit
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amazing.

the imagery in this is..well.. toxic, lol. "by driving fingers warm / and sticky into her" aha. im a sucker for subtle porn. and i love that you hint that Eden was doomed from the start, that everything goes to hell and even the picturesque perfection of bible-ism is really unholy and tainted. "eden is (finally) burning". like there's this rush of relief that it's coming undone.

but, truly.

this is wonderful.

simple, and ohsoloud.

your poems are amazing, they are slash but in a disturbingly real and possible way rather then just in a silly fan girl way

x

This was hard to understand.
Sin works like that. Except Eden isn't burning--we are.

Simply breathtaking. My jaw literally dropped.

so far this is the best piece i've read of yours, it flows so well and its so intelligent.

so how did it take me so long to read this? ha, I love it. it's grand. especially "and sticky into her and mumbling a mantra of sorts." this is really lovely, from the first line, even from the title I knew it was going to be. so, anyway, great work, once again. and, by the way, you have to be one of the nicest people here. (ha, I read over a few of your older reviews- made me smile.)

gourgeously funny and poignant.

xoxocasey

This is so beautiful, i espaicaly(sp?) love the lines about Eden burning.

Peace, Jessi

once again i feel a bit ill seeing that in all those 60 reviews you only one person who agreed that that was sick. Adam and Eve were very much in love and there were no other people yet so no STEVE! Second just the way it was writen everytime i read you work i feel like i'm reading a rape scene not to be rude but its true that is your style...pure pain. It makes me want to just sit down and pray to god for you. I bet that makes you very offended but i dont do it to hurt people but just because i hate seeing so much pain.

jesus that is unforgivingly beautiful and cathartically, wonderously empathic. apart from the adamsteve thing. i'm sorry. it just... it's too repulsive an expression to be used in poetry of this god-ity... gorgeous. wonderful. the last line... perfection.

This is more gorgeous than any words that I could say to describe it.

Slash is my air. And you are my god.

the false paradise is finally falling.your way of writing and formatting is refreshing.

great work,

sammi