Really Great job with this one. I really like how you talk about how she needs to quit, but can't because of the addiction, and the pain she goes through because of this.

Great job,

~ian

Beautiful. Loved the first stanza especially. Nice work.

I love the casual rhyming of this; it really helped to make the piece more true to life. I really enjoyed it, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

This is written very simply, but beautifully. I love the first stanza. I also love the line 'the smell of death' and 'Beautiful she is/ Innocent she is not'. Powerful. Great job.