Reviews for Egburt 2: Return of the Egg

Reviews For: Egburt 2: Return of the Egg

snorble119 2008-07-11 ch 2,	abuse:) very nice
Ra Tika 2006-11-15 ch 2, anon.	abuseaah, i reviewed too early! i went and read "Aloof I love you" and melted. please write more, if you can squeeze it out! i love your story and these poems because they are so weirdly relatable. i can't think of anything else to say except that this is exactly the kind of thing i look for and so rarely find. you've got talent. (and you're far from being bored/boring).
Ra Tika 2006-11-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseoh i loved it. (that charity shop thing) it had a certain rythmn. not awkward, and considering what it was about...well, it made sense. and it was random. random should be a flavour. randomness with an underlying significant something. fits in completely with your story.
barmy and battered 2006-08-16 ch 2,	abuse'This look is my aloof I love you' dies if only someone would sing this to me. It's so, blegh, there are no words to describe what it makes me feel inside. 'Can’t you seeInside I’m singing damn Disney?' Haha. Who doesn't sing Disney inside? My whole life has a disney soundtrack. PS. You said the first song was based on real life. Does that mean you had a similar conversation with someone near-famous/famous? That would be awesome.
Eyetk 2006-03-08 ch 1,	abuseHeya! Fictionpress glued the words 'Iplay' together, in the third stanza from the end--it's annoying that way, I know. I don't really understand the whole 'Return of the Egg', but, hey! Whatever works, hee. I was a bit confused about whether or not you had a rhyme scheme goin', here, but I can entirely sympathize with being a freak for neat little details, and the mind music. Nice song--so, cheers! - Eyetk K.
amour propre 2006-02-13 ch 2,	abuseHello, I'm the review from below (easy reader).It took me more than just a week to find enough time to review, and I'm sorry about that, but if it makes you feel any better, I always put off reviewing for the best stories/poems last because they mean that much to me. In a way it's even intimidating to write reviews for :DThere are a lot of stories on fictionpress featuring (imaginary) bands. And a lot of writers, when posting lyrics either (1) steal lyrics from their favorite band and tell the reader to pretend the song is actually by the imaginary band or (2) write lyrics on their own/use one of their own poems. Obviously, the problem with number 1 has to do with copyright issues. The problem with number 2 is that most of their lyrics are usually crappy/unrealistic. Yours are anything BUT! I was actually fooled into thinking that this was a real band, and a real album, despite your disclaimers and whatnot. I even googled it. I usually dislike blank verse/free verse in poetry, and I don't know what it is that draws me to your poems--er, songs. And I'm sorry that I can't analyze it and give you constructive criticism. There simply isn't anything to criticize. And anyway, somehow this doesn't seem like the TYPE of writing to criticize; just something to accept as it is. Now I'm sounding very stupid and getting too general. I love "that charity shop thing" as well, but my personal favorite (from this) is Aloof I love you. It's so quirky; and I LOVE the first four lines. It's like a love song, but the "aloof" in front of the "I love" (they kind of rhyme... aloof you... ah loof you... ah = i,, loof = love... sorry, I don't think you're stupd, and you're problem the one that made it intentionally like this! I'm just a little OCD) makes it not cheesy and stupid. "Magic living corpose" "Was hint at my aloof I love you" Yummy. I love your other lyrics too (from the main Rosie story) but I wanted to focus on reviewing the poems here. :D
easy reader 2006-01-26 ch 1, anon.	abuseI'm ** jealous.No time right now to elaborate, but I love your story "The Obsession With Jack", and I LOVE YOUR SONGS. Love beyond belief. I'll leave a better review next week (more time)
rrmehta364 2005-11-08 ch 1,	abusewow, i thought the band you made was nothing more than a figment of your imagination. well, i guess ill have to try to download there stuff now.
wolfblood82 2005-10-25 ch 2,	abuseWell, I guess this is a love song of sorts, huh? Anyway, I dunno if it's just me or the song should be sung in a rock like style... anyway, I think the lyrics were rather well planned. At least that's what I think since I'm a bit of an idiot in the lyrics department... P.S: New story uploaded! Hope to see your review soon!
wolfblood82 2005-10-04 ch 1,	abuseSong sounds a bit wierdm, but I still like it. One thing I'm wondering and that is, why you're giving this title? Anyway, Circles of Arven have been updated. Hope to see your review soon! ^^
mizu no kokoro 2005-10-03 ch 1,	abuseinteresting songs, i don't quite understand some parts, but i guess thats cuz i didn't read your other story yet^^ but anyways~ i liked~ keep writing!

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