That was one impressive story. I read the whole thing in one go. You made me cry, you made me empathize with the characters, and you made me realize how lucky I am. Sadly, I am still an Athiest, though I do have a better understanding of Christianity.

I very much enjoy this story. Christy sounds like a couple people I know, actually. In the beginning anyway. Jace sounds just lovely, and he, Dylan, and Candy sound a lot like my friends and I, bickery and making bad jokes at each other. Nice touches. :-) Are you going to continue writing this? I see you haven't updated in nearly a year, and I very much want to know what happens! If Christy survives or not (though I'm assuming she does, but you know what they say when you assume...).

Anyway, I like all the comments about music in there. Like Christy's knowledge on guitars and just general commentary. I LOVE music myself so it's always interesting to read it. I'm a pretty terrible guitar player myself (my hands are way too small and practicing hurt too much; I prefer piano), but I appreciate other people who can play. Anyway, enough rambling. I enjoyed it, and hope you continue to write more!

Gosh, she's got some anger, there...

Good chapter, though. I mean, y'know... aside from the language. ;) ;) lol.

Already reviewed this story, I think... anyway...

The first paragraph did not sound like a girl. Most girls that I know would not refer to other girls as "chicks". ;) Nor really use the word "guts" Those two things made it a little more masculine.

"And I don’t think he wants to, either."- that's in reference to being here, so I think..., but I'm not sure... that it would be "... wants to *be*, either."

And this is just my little pet peeve... but I guess she wouldn't actually capitalize He when speaking of God because she doesn't care. Anyway, future reference... I think I've told you this before... capitalize He when speaking about God. ;) just not here. It wouldn't fit.

All in all, not bad. It sounds like an angry girl to me... although with a few minor changes you wouldn't be able to place a female or male gender on it. If you know what I mean.

The part with Tracy was really kind of sad. I could see Christy sliding backwards right in front of me (not literally--but hopefully you know what I mean). Is this poor girl ever going to catch a break?

I actually kind of feel sorry for Tracy. Even though it's a tad selfish to only call when she 'needs' something, she gets caught in the middle of this catastrophe she knows nothing of.

Oh, the quotes around vibrate aren't necessaary.

'Tracy’s voice took on concern faster than a sinking boat.' this is a great image, but it's doesn't seem complete. '...a sinking boat taking on water.'

Ah...silly, naive Jace...I'm not sure it's necessary to have a whole big production as to how he got her number...can't it be enough that it was still in his cell from when she called him? That's a great way for Jace to become even more endearing--he could joke that she called him first, he figured it'd be okay to reciprocate the gesture...or it's payback for waking him up at 5:30.

If some guy called my mother to get my number, I'd be beyond mortified...not to mention extremely pissed that a church gave out information like that with seemingly no regard for my confidentiality. I would not want anything more to do with them and you can bet they'd hear some complaints from me. (and the guy--no matter how endearing--would have a kick in the groin)

'taking our friendship to the next level'? -- that might be a little much...

yikes--he knows EXACTLY where she lives? that wins him a one way ticket to psycho-ville

I'm glad Christy decided to go...she needs it, no matter how reluctant she is to admit it.

okay, so Dylan and Christy are drinking coffee...where'd Jace disappear to? And the conversation went from a Richard Simmons joke--which wasn't quite clear--to Christy being jealous of Jace's family with no transition. Did Christy catch his mom or dad being affectionate towards him? each other? (giving her a twinge of jealousy maybe?)

'...an hour or more...' this sounds a bit awkward

wow...that ending was a little...rough...but I really like the way you wrote it. It goes back to the writing to drew me to this story in the first place.

I like these diary chaps...I'm really getting a sense of who Christy is...

nice chapter...I like that Christy called Jace, but I have to say that if I were her, I would have hung up after the big production about it being really early. Maybe if Jace had his own phone line and you cut the mother part out completely, it would be better. Also, if someone I knew wasn't a believer called me early in the morning and started asking me questions about Jesus and God, I most certainly wouldn't complain about the time...he spoke very eloquently and said very strong things, though.

I hope Fess keeps his promise...not only for Christy, but I think it could be very beneficial to him as well.

very raw and emotional...good job :)

So much angst! But I really like the voice you've created here. I only noticed one mistake: "birthday" should be lower-case. Good job, though. I'll be back to read more.

interesting chapter...lots of ups and downs...I liked it...very realistic...I hope her dad shows up...

'“Oh, and if I get any wind that you’ve do[ne] another A+ project...'

I liked this chapter...you have a way of making your characters Christian but real...keep it up!

Interesting idea for an opening chapter. I'm really getting a sense of your main character's... character, I suppose.

I'm glad SOMEONE was nice to her--even if it is a teacher...

can Michelle get run over by a hummer or something? *bats eyelashes*

I like the way you've set this story up...with the diary entries and action descriptions being different chaps...the one thing I really don't care for is the language...but I realize that it's part of who Christy is and that's important to the story...

keep up the good work!
:)Kat

That was definitely my favorite chapter so far...all the characters that Christy ran into remind me of my friends...maybe she'll go on the retreat?