i love the ending of this chapter

oh they were so close!
I love your story[:

i was really entertained by this story so thanks for posting :) the only thing i was disappointed about was the ending. i think your final line suggested that something else (more likely bad) was going to occur that would require an impromptu love confession. so when i when i found out that was the last chapter, i thought things ended quite abruptly. i don't know if i'm going to be reading pietro's story, but i did see the potentials in his story so i think you made a good choice deciding to write that piece.
thanks again :)

lovee it :)

that was exellent!! no truely, it was great, i havent read a good story in ages and therefore i thank you for providing me with this enlightening entertainment!

great work!!

Hello there, I'm a new reviewer.

I do have to say that reading the first chapter, I'm officially hooked. In terms of writing, it flows effortlessly and overall is well written.

I do like how you've characterized Lea as a book worm. It definitely adds plenty of dimension towards the story and its plot.

I also like how you elaborate on her fascination with vampires. It's very realistic but at the same time not overboard.

Also Tobias seems like an interesting character. I'm curious to see why he rushed to hide Lea from the rest of the party.

In the end, you did a great job and I can't wait to read the next chapter.

i love it

Now first of let me just say that it was a great story, the plotline was well developed and the charactors were enjoyable. The problem is your language, there is a possiblity of someone being too prolific. Your wording was really heavy handed and formal, it distracted from the story and it didn't feel natural. There were points when it sounded like you had run it through a translating website almost. The point of the words is to tell the story, not to upshow the story. There is a thin line between poetic and pretentious. That being said, the plot was really good, it had suprises and twists and it was just really well developed. This story has potential to be excellent if you just take the wording down a notch. And I don't want you to think that I didn't like the story, because I loved it. Good job!

OMG!
I just finished chapter 7 and it was so cute!

I have so many questions for you!

Is Lea giving into him?Do they ever kiss?do they ever have sex?/Does he give into her vanilla lotion?


lol never mind...ill just read!

Chapter dos was even beter!

I could here the halleluha chorus!Tobias sounds like such a sweatheart!

OMG!

This story so far is Great! Ive only read the first chapter and im lovin itXD

I really enjoyed this story and the characters...there are so many places you could take them from here if you're so inclined! Nice work...p.s. if that was your first 'lemon' its pretty good.

This was a great story! I fell in love with the characters so fast! Good job!

Hey, this was a really adorable story. I greatly enjoyed the tension between Lea and Tobias; you did a wonderful job at pulling at my heartstrings. I only wish you’d have went deeper into the part half-breeds play in their world, you said they were lesser but I wasn’t sure how to feel when Lea turned, should I be worried she wouldn’t fit in or is there just a prejudiced? I just assumed prejudice. All the same I greatly enjoyed this story!

If i had a sexy vampire in my room, I'd be having a ** good day!! XD