V. nice poem, but I think you could leave out the last word there; it leaves a bit of ambiguity without being overly much so, and also prevents the entire poem from crashing down at the end.

beautiful. really, just... beautiful. 'but it's so cliche, a word. used so carelessly that it ceases to have a meaning' thats true, of course. awesomely wonderful job on this one.

keep on writing ~~MWR-:|:-

yes... i agree...

too true.

The "synonym: infatuation." at the end saves it from being clichéd entirely. Great concept, well-played, just that it's been done before. But that line seems appropriately cold. Nice save.

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