Great poem! What are you talking about, I think it's fantastic!

Great beginning.

"Regret-tainted tears roll down my face" Lovely lovely lovely.

"Inhale my fate, so strangely sweet" wonderful description.

"Self-loathing tears stream down my face" nice (semi) repetition - shows build up.

Great ending. Really really wonderful poem. Keep writing!

wow! that was beautiful and so sad! awesome song! you simply must put it to music!

I love your song! Out of complete boredom, I added a tune. You may have...probably have already put one, but I was just bored.

Aw..this is so sad, cause my friend's brother died in a fire and all she could do is watch...oh well. I love the way this flows...

-freak from the corner

this rocks, great job!