LOL! That was weird, but funny. Dunno why, really. But I found the screaming bit funny. So, they killed the passer-by, right?

...that was so beautiful... *weeps*

And I laughed. Is that bad?

Okay..this poem is very good..IN A SICK, CREEPY WAY! And I wonder, what ever happened to the 8th dead men?

... Humour? You call this humourous? Its humourours that you ARE calling it humourous... although i must say it has that silent hill feel to it. Good job... i guess.

That was FUNNY?! O.o Well, yeah, in a sense.

[Critique Mode ON] I kinda not like the repeatition thing you have here... but it does work in the poem... I just don't like it.

ohmigod

Bal DON'T DIE BAL

Hehe, I like this poem. It's unique, and I like all the repeated lines in each verse. And how you started by passing slowly to running. Nice one! XD

Thinking again, can I join you on the tree?

7 dead men and one dead girl, Hanging from a tree, Swinging, Swaying merrily, Shahril passes slowly, We shrieked at him, Out of fear, Chicken sandwich spurted out of his nose.

XD XD

second to last stanza just amazes me.

~* noelle

Woah...should have expected the ending to be like that...but the way you wrote it lulled me into a false sense of security! Very good - it kinda takes a feeling of the Isaw 'Esaw poems i read as a child, but hm, darker. Keep up the good work.

Ajali XOX

Wow, creepy... but cool.