Whats next, whats next?

i thought that would end happier, but i suppose that's not really realistic...oh well, i hope you get more inspiration, i do like to read your works

I get the feeling that you haven't really thought about this story...it looks kinda half-hearted to me, sorry. (I'm a ** who likes to tell the truth). It's quite good though, but it could be better...Especially your descriptions. They don't really describe, they just tell the reader some facts, and I don't quite understand them. Example: I don't live in the US, so I've got no idea how a jock looks like, seriously. I'm guessing the story is meant to be fun o.O

boy, i do hope you update soon...i like this one as much as "let's do it this way"

Sounds really good! But I want to hear more!! Lol.. keep up the good work!

i like it, plz con't.