Very nice, rather sad, and exquisitely tender. The familiar tone you used, like you were just talking to a friend, really made the piece.

At first, it reminded me of my poem, and I really understood what you meant in the whole "not really seeing the beauty" thing.

Oh, and gramatically, right at the end, you wrote "...each lost in their..." instead of "his" or "her"... conventionally, people go with the masculine. Or, you could just keep the first person vibe by changing it to "each of us lost in our own...".

But anyway, lovely job.

Oh god that was BEAUTIFUL. Just love it! I think it may be even better than "Then We Sever"!

Aw that was so sad, yet so sweet! Your descriptions were really amazing, your character conveyed so much emotions, and the story just flowed really beautifully! I don't know what else I can say, so once again, great story!

Wow. Im really speechless! I've tried putting down my thoughts about the worlds beauty like you did multiple times, but oh my gosh, wow!

I love the way you write, really, its just so amazingly beautiful!

Keep it up!Stella

xoxo

You're a poet. And it shows in this story. On its own it doesn't really convey much, as a story is meant to do, yet it captures a particular emotion at a particular given moment, elaborated and decorated with descriptions of other things (in this case, rain and the memories) So this feels like a really long poem instead of a story. But that's a compliment. I can't really slam this because I'm no expert at romance scenes either, but if anything, some pieces like the 'Book of Forgotten...something' was out of place, and by some standards, it can be considered 'too mushy', and if the ending was meant to be surprising (and I highly think it wasn't), it just wasn't. A bit too convenient for my taste. But then you know I'm saying that because I'm a sucker for tragedy and misery.

Apart from that, if the girl wanted to let the guy down softly, she shouldn't have put the smiley there in the first place, doncha think?

All in all, good job here. ^^

Awhh that's so swet. I'm a sucker for these kinda stories. Especially with a happy ending, sniff sniff.

And the reason why I'm so happy is that Bal kept making stories with horrible, horrible, sad, sick, sick ending, that mangy wolf.

Good job on this one! I like it ^^

Vivid imagery. I like your type of literary diction. Quite a nice story with romance added in. However, the phrase, "It’s all been documented in the Great Book of Unanswered Forgotten Questions" sounds out of place here.