Ooh. What an intriguing idea and set of characters. Over all, it was nicely done. This has a very quaint feel to it, a nice feel. Good job. :D

This was very interesting, it definitely help my attention. The idea of him losing the memory and asking for have hers was pretty original and it kind of struck something within me, but I'm not too sure why.

Anyway, the plotline is, for the most part, good and well-constructed, though a bit of rewording here and there could really make a huge difference for this particular piece. In some places, your sentence structure is awkward, while in others the wording is just off.

Since I'm in the mood to procrastinate, though I probably shouldn't, I think I'll go through some of the places where I thought you could edit...

“Can I borrow your memory?”. It's an interesting opening line, I'll admit, it grabbed my attention. However, I can't help but feel as if the wording could be improved a bit to make it stronger. I mean, the question is pretty blunt and I think that's important, especially since it's the first line and all but I feel like it's almost too simple, you know? Well, at least that's how I feel about it, you can decide for yourself really, I don't think it's too important but I figured I'd mention it.

"I reacted as casually as I could about it; he confused me a lot when we were on the open road. Always popping up with random and strange questions...it kinda bugged me, really." This part needs work, mostly rewording. Honestly, it sounds too informal. Instead of explaining all of the changes I would make I'm just going to rewrite it for you the way I see fit and you can decide where to go from there.."I tried to shield my reaction, attempting to act as casual as possible under the circumstances. Tom had made habit out of coming up with random, confusing questions like this, and I'll admit, it sort of bugged me."

I don't know if how crazy I am about my version either, but hopefully you get the idea.

There are other places where the wording/sentence structure can be improved and I think that if you just take the time to really go through this and fix that, this piece would benefit tremendously.

Anyway, sorry for boring you with my long review, hope you find it at least a little bit useful. Nice work here, keep it up!(if you decide to edit this let me know, I'd love to read a more finished version)

~axel gold