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| CiaoBellaxx 2007-02-05 ch 1, | abusebeautifully written. very nice concept. all i have to say is that i really like my mask. and the whole idea of the poem has me on pins and needles. very very good. its interesting to see an outsider's perspective. |
| Katterree Fengari 2006-08-04 ch 1, | abusehm, I can get this feeling of pleading for someone to trust you, good poem. I don't agree with all of how you seperate it into lines, but I like it stretched out as it is. |
| raelia 2006-07-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really like this. I can relate. Everyone hides behind a mask. Mostly it's for defense to protect yourself from getting hurt, but I also think that deep down everyone wants somebody (one person) to see through it. Great job with the poem, it says a lot. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abuseI can really empathise with this poem. I guess this is largely because I like my mask, and would rather have no one see what's inside it. Well, that's all. -peace out. |
| ashley m.c 2006-03-28 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. It didn't suck. I'm just going to blob the rest of my reviews into the last thing I read of yours okay? |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2006-01-14 ch 1, | abuseThis was really a nice concept once again. I think it is saying that those who are ugly can be soo beautiful but yet it screams that those of beauty cannot/ can be ugly. This was a jumble of words that you gave meaning to you are greatly gifted being able to do that. I was angry when the whole world seemed to scream me awake (my dad, a chair that was too uncomfortable to sleep in, my brother, and being mad at my best friend for making me sleep there in the first place!) So thank you for writing this it has helped me to calm down. I promise to read quelin's Tale soon, just not sure when. (thank water lorelei for that promise) I am sure it is good again really good job. The comment of jealousy of being hidden is so realistic. And the capitalization of No-one makes it almost a single person and someone special aswell. By the way Eve is a very pretty name. Sincerely, the Stranger in the moonlight. |
| Chanteusse 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abuseHehe. This reminds me of a story about Nobody, Somebody, Everybody and Anybody. :p It's really good. I like it. :) |
| sloppy firsts 2005-12-13 ch 1, | abusewell written. even though the cliched mask concept has been done hundreds of times you went above and beyond. you talked about what would happen when your guard slips and about the people who care for you even if you aren't happy. i really liked the question you posed at the end of the poem. it really makes you think about what is fake and what is real. Keep writing. s2 c |
| Ether Boy 2005-12-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is cool. Not showing your true self is something i actually found myself asking to myself today, of who is as they actually appear. Very good. |
| SaimiChan 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abusethese days...it's been so hard for me to trust...I've been hurt so many times before. now, i just don't know who to turn ro anymore. ^^ i like this poem. ^^ |
| Arn 2005-11-27 ch 1, | abuseAWESOME! I liked this a lot, and I'm not just saying that. I understand it sort of, people who hide under masks even though they are beautiful deep down inside but don't want anyone else to know it...I don't know, but I can relate to this very well, somehow. Damn, I wish I could write poetry like you, but alas, I can't, so...what the hell. Whatever, um, yeah I guess no one is very special. But at least once the mask that shrouds your face slips, and you can get a look at the person. That is good, because...what the HELL, I can't think right now. Sorry, I know I probably shouldn't review when I'm in a mood like this, like when my mind phases out. Sorry. This still rocks, you know... X-Eragon-X |
| poetic abortion 2005-11-15 ch 1, | abuse[this is NOT a review for your poem (that is at the bottom) but a comment on your review to my "Portraite in Decadence"] regarding the halo part of the poem; I was aiming for a noose but the idea of an angel in a previous life ,or WAS, intrigues me. I normally let my readers wander on what my poetry is about, because I think that is what good poets should do, but I also try to be blunt on certain aspects of my poems. ^^; but thank you. I just relized now I had not replied in a long while. I am so sorry. OK. I liked this greatly, not really my cup of tea since it was pretty long, but I just loved your word use and powerful voice in this. what can I say? the poem stands on its own without toppling from the enormous weight of its subject, a feat I must say. there are specific lines that touched a chord in me, I'm odd that way but I think that there were certain lines and questions which roused some very powwerful thoughts from me. I must say; 'Why is he allowed/where no-one else can/go??' - I have no clue how to answer that and it ensnares my soul tightly with that nagging thought and yet I KNOW the answer somewhere deep inside me. because I am the same as 'he' in a certain aspect. ~* noelle |
| TheBrokenWanderer 2005-10-30 ch 1, | abuseI'm scared to think what would happen if my mask slipped off...oh, wait...that's right...i have no mask...silly me...my misery is open to the world... ~TheBrokenWanderer~ |
| White Tea and Ginger 2005-10-30 ch 1, | abuseOnce again, I like this a lot. I can really relate. A friend of mine wrote a poem about a mask once, this is really similar. I love the idea. I especially love this line; 'Why is he allowed/where no-one else can/go??'. I think maybe it has to do with how people in our society generally try and appear so happy, smiley and polite every day when they're at school or at work. But those people who are so truly real are more well-rounded than that, more themselves. At least that's my take on it. Anyway, keep up the great work.Hillary |
| Lostwind 2005-10-28 ch 1, | abuseNot terrible at all, I liked it, very interesting. You do good work, I'll keep checking back for more. |