I really like the short lines, I think it adds something to it... not sure what but the choppy-ness is good. Thanks for reviewing my stuff!

that is indeed a different twist. But, it's still a really good poem... *nods* *continues nodding* *people look at as thou i am a bobble head doll* *stops nodding* ANyway, very good, me like it sis! *hugs* now, seeyah, cause i'm talking to you! *waves*

Short but so meaningful. Wonderful. Loved it to bits. Keep it up.