Hi, well somehow Otaku Mom didn't seem to fit this website so I used another name. I laughed when I realized I used rose as part of it...hope you don't mind. I thought I would take a look at your fic and I think it definitely has possibility. I think you have a good concept and it reads smoothly. If you continue it,I'll be happy to read it.

I do have one suggestion though, have someone check your word usage. You are using words correctly, but you are using the homonym(sounds the same but has a different meaning...I'm sure you know this, but I'm not sure if this term is still in use, I've been out of school a long time) instead of the word you mean to use.example Libel versus liableLibel- crime for defamingliable - likely to...There were a few other examples as well.waist vs waste and such as that. It doesn't detract much from your story but I do notice if the wrong spelling of words are used. Other than that, I like your style and I like the base you are building your story upon.

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