Wow.This idea is so wonderful...so gritty.Just lovely,really.

E.Ebony

I like how you play with the idea of Romeo as he is intoxicated. Its a powerful metaphore and interesting imagry. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

Maryjane, I'm all for constructive criticism but your review made no sense. How exactly is she trying too hard? Please elaborate. I understand everyone has different opinions on good poetry but honestly just saying "ugh" over multiple times and saying the writer is "trying too hard" isn't exactly the most intelligent way of voicing your opinions.

I may be biased seeing as I'm a friend of the author's and all, but I thought the poem was good and isn't trying too hard at all.

ugh yuck.

you're trying too hard.this was discusting and not well written.ugh ugh ugh.