Wow. Incredible. The third stanza just grabbed me and blew me apart. Tragically beautiful.

Keep it up.

Trembling and dangeriously daring.

OH MY GOD? that is fucking amazing. jesus. i ADORE the summary last lines.. the imagery is just so fucking powerful. on my favourites list you go :

immensly powerful

Brilliant.

wow.. very powerful and beautiful.. awesomely done...(ps. if you have the time could you tell me which of my poems you like best.. I'd relaly appreciate it. Thanks!)

There's so many lines I loved from this.

"her tiptoe-face"

"yesterdays cement"

"flood into my heart like boiling water"

"she looks like lilies in a trashcan"

"bee stung lips"

Wow. What a captivating piece. Crazy creative. And I ADORE the title. It's just… it's so .softly as you .breath and understand why your .won' .beating. (My reviews are very poetic today. I think I need to take a break and write.) It's a wonderful piece. I adore it. Never stop writing.

my heart beat stopped toward the end. actually every stanza made it pulse irradicly. really, this is perfection and the ending in particular is so very strong. the imagery in this, as in all your poetry, is divine. I could ramble on-and-on about how talented you are and dazzeling your poetry is but I'd get repetative. I lovelovelove this to the third degree.

* noelle

p.s: I apologize on not reviewing this sooner.

Very intense; well written. Brava.

Amazing. Beautifully written. The imagery you've got is fantastic- things I never even would have dreamed of.

I love this. Great piece.

-Hillary-

First off, thanks a million and four for the review. It made me happy. And a big thanks for pointing out that Brandon mistake. I could not believe I hadn't noticed that before. I think I've probably read that story like 20 times now, and not once have I seen it. Nobody else has pointed it out either. Quite embarrassing. Brandon was the dude in the story before BCDC. I must've been thinking about it or something. Me not know.

Anyways ... on to you poem.

This is some of the most amazing imagery I've ever seen. Like one after another. And amazing similies and metaphors that I've never seen before. The third stanza had to be my favorite. Every word in that was awesomely written. I'm a little confused with there being three people in this. There's "you", he and she. Usually there would only be two in this. Are "you" supposedly standing to the side watching this?

Eh, it doesn't matter. Great poem.

"his voice fizzes / on his tongue / spitting out excuses"

brilliance.

omg. this is going in the favs. its incredible. i loved the first and third stanzas the best. wow. just amazing.

O_o... woah. A simply 'wow' poem. loved it, but really was sad. Awesomeness, keep it up! Thanks for my review!

wonderfully written & an excellent piece. i love all of your work, & this is no exception. kudos - please, please keep writing.