Fantastic poem.

Nice start.

"Memories flashing like a slide-show on speed" lovely description.

"blood on the carpet, in the tub, on my arm, down cascades of loneliness and longing." very well emphasised.

"Memories." so simple and yet so good.

"The pale orange dances at the end of my fingertips" lovely description.

Lovely ending. Really good. I like the way you sort of have it all building up to the question and then the cigarette goes out, leaving you in the dark. fantastic poem. Keep writing!

HOLY FRIGGIN' WOW! I love the whole idea of this poem and everything. My friend said I was the next Edgar Allan Poe. I think you'd be even better at it. You're better with symbolic stuff and images.

Ok... creepy but good, great job

"Memories, flashing like a slide-show on speed" for some reason I love that line..I mean, I love the rest of it as well, but that line sounds cool..heh..amazing work as usual

-freak from the corner

wow! i love the last line!