Excellent. I'm marking you down on my list of "People who can actually write on this god damn website."

I must say, despite that modesty of yours you're a damn good writer, much better than I could ever hope to be (Wow look, I got about 34 words down before self pity kicked in, a new record for me!).

The way you vocalise Early's character perfectly through your narration is a feat that most aspiring writers would murder for, I fear that my characters have difficulty dragging themselves from the realms of two dimensions.

Anyway if I said that I wasn't interested in reading the rest of this story I'd have to stamp the words 'Big Fat Liar' on my forehead.

Keep up the excellent work.

::thumbs up::

holy **! hell yeah i wanna read more! where the ** is the rest of it?!

Well, it's got the "End of the World" vibe down pat. Loved it. I'd definitely be interested in reading more.

Wow... Really, wow.

Awesome! Just awesome! You put us in the pilot seat with Red One and it rocked. I liked how it was narrated in his voice, and it remained constant the whole way through.

Great action and this could very well stand alone, but I would love to know how you plan to follow this up. A shame you don't plan on updating this.

M.C.

"If you want to read the whole thing, send an email to samnolting at hotmail dot com."

You just posting teasers now? :)

Really like this. The language is great. Great rhythm, great word choice, great images. I found myself leaning forward during the battle. Your point of view gets a little murky during take-off (switching between first and third).

I doubt this will end well, but I have to know. Does this count as my email? I'll wait a couple days, then send a real one. ;) Good job.

Nice. Been a while since I've been on fictionpress -- good to know that it's not all crap.